In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some way. Why is this ? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Recently, when
companies
make advertisements, they are highlighting new features of their
products
more frequently. One of the main reason
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trend is financial outcomes
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the
companies
and from my perspective,
this
is a positive development because it
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both
of
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the economy and innovation.
Companies
use additional new features as
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advertisement strategy
,
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because
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about human behaviour in shopping shows that our
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more open to
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and
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new things. In that way,
companies
can boost their product sales with little change in marketing strategy.
Furthermore
, they can sell
same
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product with higher margins because of the additional features.
For instance
, Apple uses that methodology every year
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for their smartphones. They only upgrade one or two aspects of their devices, and sell these
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higher
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.
Lastly
, when new competitors enter
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the
market
, old players may want to re-brand their old
products
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don’t lose to their
market
share. All these actions have positive effects on the
companies
, people and the economy. When
companies
increase their sales and
margin
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, they will
also
increase their incomes.
Moreover
, if
companies
increases
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their revenue,
also
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prises
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will increase too.
This
also
boost
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wealth who makes investment
to
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these organizations. Another positive
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to the people is ;
they
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will have
a
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more access to
an
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advance products
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products
in the
market
that
is
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produced by innovation.
Also
, with increasing earnings, businesses will pay more taxes. In that way, governments can make more
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to
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the areas that
important
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for society
such
as health and education. In conclusion, organizations have different motivations to use ‘’new’’ as a marketing strategy. I believe that
,
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this
trend brings lots of positive aspects to the free
market
and
drive
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the economy in a good way which
also
brings additional
reseources
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resources
to the governments
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improve countries’
overall
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.
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  • Innovation
  • Fast-paced
  • Distinguishing
  • Psychological aspect
  • Inherently
  • Perceived
  • Continuous improvement
  • Revolutionary
  • Feasible
  • Throwaway culture
  • Undervalue
  • Longevity
  • Obscure
  • Novelty
  • Unsatisfactory
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