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Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email, •recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn •explain how your friend could learn this sport • suggest that you both learn this sport together

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Dear Jai, Hope you are in the best of health. I believe you enjoy the beauty and culture of our town. As you asked me to suggest a new sport which you can easily learn in our locality, I am writing
this
 letter and hope you like my suggestion.
Firstly
, our residential area is popular for sports as a number of events are organized every month. There are separate stadiums for soccer,
cricket
, badminton courts and swimming pools.
According to
 me, you will learn
cricket
 because it is a very interesting game which you enjoy the most.
Besides
, it is a good way to do exercise and make our body in perfect shape.
Moreover
, you can join the youth sports academy which is totally free and provides training to play
cricket
.
In addition
 to
it
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, you can select your own schedule as you studied in a college so it is good for you to pick a slot in the evening.
Furthermore
, it is easy for you to meet new players and you can participate in local sports events once you get trained in how to play
cricket
. Especially, you will be happy to hear that I am
also
 willing to learn
this
 sport as I really enjoy watching
cricket
 on television.
Therefore
, I feel we will start practising
this
 game from next Monday. I believe you agree with me and I am waiting for your response. Best regards, LS
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