The youth crime rate is rising rapidly in many countries. What are the reasons for this trend? What can parents and teachers do to solve it?

In the modern world, many places are
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louder than before
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roads, construction and parties.
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that there should be control over noise,
someone
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thinks
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that
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action is possible. I think that people should be quiet if they live in communities, their sound will annoy their
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.
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essay will discuss my point of view and will give reasons to explain
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with, the reasons why noise should be
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. First of all, if they live in big communities,
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,
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task response
Ensure that the essay addresses the topic completely and provides a clear response to the given prompt.
coherence cohesion
Organize the essay in a logical structure with clear introduction and conclusion paragraphs.
lexical resource
Improve the range of vocabulary used in the essay and ensure appropriate usage.
grammatical range
Work on improving the grammatical accuracy and range of sentence structures in the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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