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The line graph shows Paris Metro station passengers. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows Paris Metro station passengers. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows the
number
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 of passengers
in
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at
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Paris
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the Paris
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 Metro Station
according
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according to
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 the time schedule.
Overall
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,
subway
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the subway
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 station works from 6
am
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a.m.
 to 10
pm
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p.m
.
Moreover
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, at
the
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apply
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first sight, it can be seen that
,
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apply
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 from 8.00-9.00 am and 18.00-19.00 are the busiest time. From the
starting
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start
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 of the
day
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day,
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 only 100
people
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 visit
metro
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the metro
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 and
in
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an
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 additional 3
hours
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 that
number
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 is increased to 200.
Furthermore
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, approximately at 8.30
number
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 of
people
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 shows its peak at 400 passengers. Afterwards, for
next
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the next
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 two
hours
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number
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the number
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 of
people
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 decreases
just
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to just
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 under 200.
Furthermore
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, until 12:00 numbers are increasing,
than
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then
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 for 3
hours
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 they stay stable at 300.
Nevertheless
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,
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
people
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 plummets to its initial point. Having decreased
at
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to
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 16:00, at 18;30 it soars up to the previous highest peak after half an hour it soars back to 100.
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, it for the
last
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 2
hours
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 until closing it flactuates.
Finally
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, stops at 100
number
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 of
people
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "soars" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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