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Academic Task 1 The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

Academic Task 1 The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The bar chart displays
the
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information about
accomadation
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accommodation
which
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rented and owned
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by household
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household
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households
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 in England and Wale
during
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between
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 1918 and 2011
period
. Calibration of houses done in percentages.
Overall
, in 1918 rented accommodation was at the maximum level and
then
 it
was
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gradually
decrease
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decreased
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untill
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until
 2011. The owned household accommodation started
increase
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to increase
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 from 1918 to 1991 and
then
 it
had
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fluctuated during
next
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the next
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 10
years
.
To begin
 with,
maximum
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the maximum
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 of
rentred
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rented
 housing was laying between 70%-80%. The lowest percentage was around 30% in 2001. After 2001, it
has
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slightly increased
upto
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up to
 35% in
next
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the next
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 10
years
 of
period
. It can be clearly observed that increasing the percentage of owned houses from 23% to 68%. For the said increment took 83
years
 from 1918. After
the
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2001
slight
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a slight
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 decrease was taken place up to 65%. The
overall
 households in owned accommodation
acuse
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cause
 the improvement during 1918-2011
period
. The graph
was
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obviously
providing
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provides
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 the
contrast
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contrasting
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 behavior of
the
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renting houses and owning
housed
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houses
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 during the
93
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93-year
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years
 of
period
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • households
  • owned accommodation
  • rented accommodation
  • percentage
  • trend
  • proportion
  • fluctuation
  • turning point
  • socio-economic factors
  • period
  • key points
  • increase/decrease
  • surpass
  • significant
  • main features
  • comparisons
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