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the diagram below shows information about carbon dioxide emissions for popular private jets. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

the diagram below shows information about carbon dioxide emissions for popular private jets. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given table provides information about the emission of carbon dioxide (in gallons of
fuel
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,
pounds
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 of CO2, and the cost of flight) from popular private jets.
Overall
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,
Gulfstream
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 III uses the highest gallons of
fuel
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 and has the highest
pounds
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 of CO2,
while
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Cessna
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 CJ II is the lowest.
In addition
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, there are three levels of flight prices of
aircrafts
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aircraft
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.
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with
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Gulfstream
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 has the highest consumption of
fuel
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 with 488 and has the highest
pounds
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 (lbs) of CO2 at 10,078. Meanwhile,
Cessna
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 CJ II uses the lowest energy with 136 and produces the lowest of CO2 which is 3,002.
Next,
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Gulfstream
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 550 is in
the
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apply
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second place
of
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in
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 the consumption of
fuel
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 with 378.
Then
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, Challenger 605, Learjet 60, and
Cessna
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 Citation XLS consume between 200 and 300 gallons of
fuel
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, followed by
Hawker
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 800XP (188),
Hawker
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 400XP (188) and Beechjet 400 (182). In terms of
pounds
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 (lbs) of CO2,
Gulfstream
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 550 has 8,342, followed by Challenger 605 at 6,180.
Moreover
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, the five other
aircrafts
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aircraft
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 have around 4 to 5 thousand.
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, the cost of the flight
divides
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 into three categories. There are $6,750 (for
Gulfstream
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 III,
Gulfstream
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 550, and Challenger 605), $4,500 (for Learjet 60,
Cessna
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 Citation XLS, and
Hawker
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 800XP), and $2,700 (for
Hawker
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 400XP, Beechjet 400, and
Cessna
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 CJ II).

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, pounds, co, gulfstream, cessna, hawker, xp with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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