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Some countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world. To what extend is this a positive or negative trend? Every country develops its products through importing and exporting and this will have a good effect on its economy, especially import is important for every country. In this essay, it will be considered about import is agree or disagree.

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Importation has become a
trend
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 in globalisation, wherein different
countries
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 coordinate and obtain
resources
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 from others to exchange
goods
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 and services.
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will
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explain how far
this
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 practice can be a positive
trend
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.
Firstly
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, importation provides
opportunity
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an opportunity
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 for
countries
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 to exchange
goods
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 with other
nations
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. Exchanging
of
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products allows
countries
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 to obtain
resources
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 unavailable in their geographic locations.
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, Asian
countries
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such
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 as Vietnam and Thailand are importing rice to Western
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 in exchange
of
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for
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 electronic products
such
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 as electronic chips
of
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for
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 televisions and computers.
This
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 set-up describes a practice of sharing, which can
also
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 strengthen relationships between
nations
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.
Sharing
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The sharing
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 of
goods
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 highlights the characteristics of strong relationships, which
denotes
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denote
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 collaboration and cooperation between
nations
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.
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, the close ties between Australia and China
revolves
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 not only in
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 but
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 in business. Most of the household items and food displayed in shops in Australia
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originated in China, and some of the biggest companies in Australia are managed by
Chinese
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the Chinese
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.
This
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 give-and-take relationship supports both
nations
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, which is a positive
trend
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 in terms of economic development and
peace
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 in the community.
Peace
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 and order can
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 be an effect of
nations
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 sharing
resources
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. By way of illustration, Americans are sourcing oil
resources
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 from
middle
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east
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countries
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,
then
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 Americans are sending a military force
in
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to
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 Iraq or Syria to aid in maintaining
peace
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. In conclusion,
importation
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the importation
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 of a large amount of food from other
countries
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 is a positive
trend
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. It provides
resources
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 not available in their
countries
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, which support the needs of their people.
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,
sharing
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the sharing
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 of
goods
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 between
countries
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 may unite
nations
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 to collaborate with each other to develop
peace
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 in their home country and prosperity in their economy.
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Task Response
Make sure to clearly state your position on whether importation is a positive or negative trend in your introduction. This will help set the tone for the essay and make your argument more clear.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that there is a clear logical flow in your essay. Each paragraph should build upon the previous one and support your main points.
Lexical Resource
Expand your range of vocabulary to add variety and depth to your essay. This can be achieved by using synonyms, idiomatic expressions, or more sophisticated vocabulary.
Grammatical Range
Pay attention to your grammar usage, especially with sentence structure and verb tense consistency. Make sure to proofread your essay and correct any grammatical errors.

Your opinion

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