Many people hold the view that it is better to buy their house than rent it. Do you agree with this statement or not?

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The majority of
people
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believe that it is better to buy a house than rent one.
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could not agree with
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idea and in
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will support my opinion with examples. Let's be frank,renting a
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has
advantages
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.First,it is the best way for
people
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who have modest incomes,so
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can rent a
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and
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other money on the other problems.
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,it is easy to move
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without rebuilding or buying a new house.What is more ,renting a
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has lower insurance costs and lower utility costs than buying a
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.
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,buying a
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beneficial for the
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,in many countries owning a
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can enhance your social standing .
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, Indian
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who live in rented homes are considered poor.Another
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advantages
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buying
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of buying
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is that
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can pass down the property to their children.There are several other
advantages
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too.
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do not have to move frequently.And they can design the space
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their preferences.None of
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is possible if
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live in a rented
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. In conclusion,
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renting
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a
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has many
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,I am deeply convinced that buying a
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is a long-term investment.
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