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Many people hold the view that it is better to buy their house than rent it. Do you agree with this statement or not?

#people #house #rent
The majority of
people
 believe that it is better to buy a house than rent one.
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 could not agree with
this
 idea and in
this
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 will support my opinion with examples. Let's be frank,renting a
home
 has
advantages
.First,it is the best way for
people
 who have modest incomes,so
people
 can rent a
home
 and
spent
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 other money on the other problems.
Moreover
,it is easy to move
home
 without rebuilding or buying a new house.What is more ,renting a
home
 has lower insurance costs and lower utility costs than buying a
home
.
On the other hand
,buying a
home
 beneficial for the
populations
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.
Firstly
,in many countries owning a
home
 can enhance your social standing .
For example
, Indian
people
 who live in rented homes are considered poor.Another
advantages
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buying
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 is that
people
 can pass down the property to their children.There are several other
advantages
 too.
People
 do not have to move frequently.And they can design the space
according to
 their preferences.None of
this
 is possible if
people
 live in a rented
home
. In conclusion,
although
 renting
in
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a
home
 has many
advantages
,I am deeply convinced that buying a
home
 is a long-term investment.
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