Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

A group of people think that all
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university students should have a chance to
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their own disciplines. Another group believe that only
science
and
technology
-related
subjects
should exist for study. Though It is the era of
science
and
technology
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It's not the be-all and end-all. I personally agree with the first group very strongly. Humanity and social
science
-related
subjects
are
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of mirror of our life. Literature, Philosophy, History, World Religion, International Relations etc.
subjects
act like a bridge between
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and society.
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,
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business-related
subjects
, like Management, Marketing, Organization Strategy etc. are well connected with our lives because we are living in a world of trade as well. Though humanities and social sciences can not play a vast role
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scientific
area
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but they are extremely needed to keep people's
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minds
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live
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and fresh.
Additionally
, a student is independent
to choose
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his life goal. It is not
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responsibilty
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responsibility
of someone to set a rule to drive students in a selected way
whereas
the other ways are not harmful
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the
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mankind.
On the other hand
, I must say that the
subjects
will be useful in the future and not only related to
science
and
technology
but
also
science
of
mind
and human well-being. Only
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society will be unable to make people delighted. Obviously, the
science
and
technology
-related
subjects
have a great appeal but they are everything.
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" is not selected for
science
and
technology
only. If someone
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food for their
mind
,
such
as inner peace, literary practice,
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therapy,
always
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science
and
technology
will not be able to help them with full power. In Conclusion, I am bound to say that
science
and
technology
have obviously
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major role in the future but they are not adequate to calm the human
mind
and not the only way for the survival of
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mankind, so, students should study
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subjects
whatever they want.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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