Some parents believe that their children should do educational activities during their free time. Others say that in this way children are under pressure. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Education has become the top priority for everyone nowadays. Most guardians believe that learning tasks ought to be incorporated into their offspring's free time,

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others vocalise by adding that doing so creates a sense of burden on these young minds. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will discuss the above-stated notions in detail and will explain why I opine that amalgamation of

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and leisure is the best way to tackle

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with, most caretakers think that imposing learning activities

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the break period is important to achieve academic excellence.

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them, it could particularly aid in scoring higher grades but in

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it creates too much pressure on their children's

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a survey, more than two-thirds of

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parents believe that children

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should educate themselves in their free time

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could worsen their school performance.

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, the majority of them differ by adding that

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scenario builds up a sense of burden

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these youngsters.

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can have disastrous consequences on the children's brain health like juvenile anxiety and depression. To illustrate, about 15 per cent of

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youngsters suffer from undiagnosed mental illnesses like childhood depression and many more. I opine that

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to achieve maximum academic potential, an amalgamation of

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and leisure activities like playing and reading comics, should be instilled by all the caretakers. In

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way, the brain not only gets time to re-energize but

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increase

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its performance to a greater extent.

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, the Ministry of Education has made it

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for all guardians to incorporate the idea of breaks into their child's

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schedule to maintain the equilibrium.

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, more and more parents will try to maximise their offspring's academic performance by making them

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day and night. It's the guardian's responsibility to realise the importance of breaks in between learning hours for letting their child's nurturing

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grow to its full potential.