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You have decided to leave your current job even though you enjoy it. Write a letter to inform your manager of your decision. In your letter -tell the manager about your decision and the reason for it. -describe what you learnt in your current job. -and ask the manager to write a reference letter to help you with future employment.

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Dear Ms. Jones, I am writing to share with you some important pieces of news. I have
finally
 graduated from my uni and have got my
bachelor
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bachelor's
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 degree in
software
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the software
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 development field. I am contemplating
about
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apply
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seeking
for
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a job in
IT
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the IT
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 sector, and I am going to leave the company in three to six months
,
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 because I am eager to try my skills in a product development team as an ICT business analyst.
Ms.
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 Jones, thank you very much for your
guidence
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guidance
. I have learned a bunch of demanding abilities
such
 as
helding
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holding
 meetings, writing complex, well-structured letters and managing my time, over the
last
 two years.
Moreover
, now I make coffee like a god. I would like to ask you for help with a reference letter for my future employment. If you do not mind, I will send you the first draft next week. I look forward
for
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 hearing from you.
Your
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 sincerely, Rebeca Moody
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task achievement
Ensure clarity in the purpose of the letter. The opening paragraph should clearly establish the context and intention of your resignation. Avoid being too informal; maintain a professional tone throughout.
task achievement
Avoid vague terms such as 'a bunch of demanding abilities' and specify the learned skills to demonstrate clear progress and professionalism.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea. Break complex information into more manageable parts for better organization and structure.
coherence cohesion
Use proper greetings and closings. 'Your sincerely' should be corrected to 'Yours sincerely'. The tone should be consistent with professional correspondence.
suitable writing tone
Address the manager with due respect and politeness. Avoid phrases like 'I make coffee like a god', which are too informal for this context.
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