The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration below depicts the use of various platforms like
tv
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TV
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,
radio
, print,
online
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and online
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for getting information about the current events happening around the world in Canada and Australia. The values are expressed in percentages.
Overall
, in both
nations
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nations,
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more than two-thirds of the population saw
tv
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TV
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and online news
whereas
the least proportion of individuals chose
radio
and print as an option. In Canada, around 40 per
cent
people
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of people
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watched the news on
tv
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TV
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,
following
this
, exactly 4 per
cent
less population than the former value got the same information online. Approximately, 14 per
cent
individuals
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of individuals
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read the printed versions,
while
only 7 per
cent
listened
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listened to
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it on the
radio
. More than 50 per
cent
persons
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of persons
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educated themselves by the online portal in Australia.
After
this
, about 37 per
cent
saw the news on
tv
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TV
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,
while
only 2 and 7 per
cent
of them got the knowledge from
radio
and print
version
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versions
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, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, radio, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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