imports electronic goods in million The diagrams show a museum and its surroundings in 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts information on the
number
of imported electronic items between 2000 and 2006.
Overall
, it is clear that
during a given period, the most imported units were televisions
. In addition
, while
the number
of DVD players
, televisions
and radios exhibited an upward trend, the number
of CD players
and video recorders experienced a downward trajectory.
In 2000, the number
of imported DVD players
stood at 3 million
which then
ascended
nearly twofold in the next six years. Verb problem
increased
Likewise
, there was a noticeable rise in radios, rising from 4 million
to 5.2 million
while
CD players
which stood at 2.1 million
experienced a slightly
decrease to 1.7 Change the adverb
slight
million
.
Regarding the televisions
and video recorders, in the initial year, both of
items were in the same proportion, accounting for 6.2 Change preposition
apply
million
. Nevertheless
, in the subsequent years (2006), the number
of imported televisions
shot up to nearly a third while
video recorders decrease
Wrong verb form
decreased
more
than a halved.Change preposition
by more
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