Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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some
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,
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universities
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should give an opportunity to choose other disciplines aside from the main subjects.
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others are sure that all attention of
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should
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on gaining a
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to become a professional in their sphere. I assume
students
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should have a chance to study any subject they want, and the
universities
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need to support
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in
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aspect.
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One
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the
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hand,
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purpose of going to a
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is to gain a
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, which gives a chance to work in a specific area.
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, the
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staff assures that being focused on
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sphere is a preferable way to educate a good professional with greater expertise and career prospects.
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, a student in a medical
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must spend a considerable amount of
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to study
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many disciplines to get a
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, so,
students
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cannot allocate
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to be interested in
other field
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another field
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.
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, there is no proof to the statement that spending all your
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to
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one
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specific specialization may increase your chance to become a perfect worker.
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, I do not see any problem when
students
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want to study other subjects apart from
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major
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. To be just interested in something without any goals is understandable and natural, it can be taken as a hobby in some cases. So having extra
time
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for a new occupation does not harm
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and their academic progress.
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, I had extra courses in acting, which did not make an impact on my
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major, even though I graduated
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university
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with high academic performance.
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,
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universities
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should encourage
students
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to be versatile and wear many hats, because there are no disadvantages.
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,
students
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should focus on studying to get a
qualification
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, but the
universities
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do not have to deny their eagerness to extend their knowledge. So it depends on a student and his/her requests.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Broaden
  • Perspectives
  • Specialize
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Career success
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Structured path
  • Clear goals
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Academic credibility
  • Recognition
  • Balance
  • Exploring
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