You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The Bar Chart illustrates the trend of how
people
who were born outside and inside
Australia
living
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in urban, rural, and town between 1995 and 2010. Basically, Most of the
people
who were born in
Australia
in the mid-nineties prefer to live in
cities
rather than
towns
and rural
areas
. The same trend is observed for the
people
who were born outside
Australia
. About 60
percent
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per cent
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of non-Australians tend to live in
cities
and more than 40
percent
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per cent
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of Australians
lives
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live
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in
cities
. In both cases,
people
prefer to live in
cities
.
However
,
people
living in
towns
and rural
areas
are comparable less than
people
living in
cities
. 20
percent
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per cent
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of Australians
lives
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live
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in
towns
and more than 20
percent
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per cent
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of the Australian Population
lives
in Rural
Areas
. Non-Australians
shows
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show
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a different trend where 40
percent
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per cent
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of the population
lives
in rural
areas
and less than 20
percent
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per cent
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lives
in rural
areas
. In 2010, 60
percent
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per cent
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of Australian
People
were born in
Cities
,
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apply
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and less than 20
percent
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per cent
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of the population
born
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was born
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either in
towns
or rural
areas
. But, Non-Australians were born mostly in
cities
rather than
towns
and rural
areas
whereas
a whooping 80
percent
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per cent
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were born outside
Australia
living in
cities
.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia, cities, towns, areas, percent, lives with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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