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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the bar chart shows
that
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apply
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how parents
spend
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spent
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their weekly revenue in one
counrty
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country
county
in 1968 and 2018 ,
over all
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overall
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 it can be seen that , people in
the
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both of time spent their
money
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 on
foods
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food
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,housing,
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and lesuir
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lesuir
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leisure
more than
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others
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other
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things
,.
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,
.
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 refers to those goods or activities that they spent a lot of
money
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 on it
such
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 as food,
intertament
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entertainment
,
housing
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and housing
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 , citizens in 1968 expensed a large amount of
money
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 on food
wich
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which
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was %35 that was
a
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the
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heightes
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highest
amount of
money
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 ,
however
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 at the same year individuals spent
money
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 on their
others
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 requirement
such
Linking Words
 as spending
money
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 on
fule
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fuel
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 and power, personal goods and transportations all
others
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 goods under %10 percentage .
in contrast
Linking Words
, people
has
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have
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 spent
al
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a
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ot
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lot
 of
money
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 in their free time by
amount
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the amount
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 of approximately %23 ,
in
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apply
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2018
although
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 the
levels
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level
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 of spending
money
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 in a week on
foods
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food
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was dramatic
decline
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declined
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to %16 ,
as well as
Linking Words
the
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apply
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people
spend
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spent
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 more
money
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 on housing by about % 18 rather than food and
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others
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other
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propertes
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property
, even thought ,
others
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propertes
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properties
property
was vital and on
a regular bases
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a regular base
regular bases
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 they expensed on them by
per centage
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percentage
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 of under %20 .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, others with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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