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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the bar chart shows
that
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how parents
spend
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spent
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their weekly revenue in one
counrty
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country
county
in 1968 and 2018 ,
over all
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overall
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 it can be seen that , people in
the
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both of time spent their
money
 on
foods
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food
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,housing,
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and lesuir
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lesuir
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leisure
more than
others
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other
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things
,.
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,
.
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 refers to those goods or activities that they spent a lot of
money
 on it
such
 as food,
intertament
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entertainment
,
housing
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and housing
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 , citizens in 1968 expensed a large amount of
money
 on food
wich
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which
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was %35 that was
a
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the
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heightes
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highest
amount of
money
 ,
however
 at the same year individuals spent
money
 on their
others
 requirement
such
 as spending
money
 on
fule
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fuel
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 and power, personal goods and transportations all
others
 goods under %10 percentage .
in contrast
, people
has
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have
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 spent
al
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a
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ot
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lot
 of
money
 in their free time by
amount
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the amount
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 of approximately %23 ,
in
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apply
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2018
although
 the
levels
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level
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 of spending
money
 in a week on
foods
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food
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was dramatic
decline
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declined
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to %16 ,
as well as
the
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people
spend
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spent
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 more
money
 on housing by about % 18 rather than food and
others
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other
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propertes
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property
, even thought ,
others
propertes
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properties
property
was vital and on
a regular bases
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a regular base
regular bases
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 they expensed on them by
per centage
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percentage
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 of under %20 .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, others with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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