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You have recently faced a problem in airport an employee of the airport helpd you with this matter write a letter to Mangager and say WHAT THE PROBLEM was How that person helped you Suggest to Manger to praise this employee in some way

#airport #employee #helpd #matter #mangager #person #manger #praise
Dear sir, I am writing
this
 letter to thank
you
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to
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your
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one of
best
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a best
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employee
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 who
helps
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me during my difficult time in
airport
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the airport
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. His name is Rohan Sharma, and I was going to
new
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 York to Delhi for my business trip.
Last
 week, I was going to collect my bag
then
 suddenly, I
notice
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 my luggage was not there. I faced
problem
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to locate
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 it,
due to
lack
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 of language understanding.
Then
, I met with Rohan,
he
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and he
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 guided me and
helps
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 me to find my suitcase in
'Lost
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the 'Lost
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 and Found' department where one person already deposited it. That bag was very important for me because my all business documents
was
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 in the bag. As well, he booked
cab
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a cab
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 for me and
explain
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 to
driver
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the driver
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 my location where I was going to stay for one week. It would be very kind for you if you
coney
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convey
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 my thanks to him. He is
kind
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a kind
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 and helpful person just
of
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because of
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 his help today my company received
big
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a big
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 order. If possible can you announce him as
a
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 best employee of the month
.
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 Once again thank you so much and your employee
to help
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for helping
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 me. Yours faithfully Harman
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Task Response
Include more specific details about the problem you faced at the airport and how it impacted you. Provide more information about the assistance received from the employee.
Coherence and Cohesion
The logical structure of the letter could be improved by organizing the content into more coherent paragraphs. Additionally, consider using appropriate linking words to connect ideas and improve the flow of the letter.
Lexical Resource
Expand the range of vocabulary used in the letter to express ideas more precisely and effectively. Consider using a wider variety of words and phrases.
Grammatical Range
Review the letter for grammatical errors and consider using a greater variety of sentence structures to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical knowledge.
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