Some people think the newly built houses should be the same as the old housing styles in local areas. Others argue that local authorities should allow people to build houses in their own style. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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more normal and talk about my opinion.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • historical preservation
  • architectural harmony
  • aesthetic appeal
  • tourist attraction
  • community pride
  • architectural innovation
  • energy-efficient
  • eco-friendly designs
  • personal expression
  • advanced materials
  • sustainable housing
  • resilient housing
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