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Some people think that a person improves intellectual skills better when doing group activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #person #skills #group #activities
Yes,
according to
 me a
person
’s intellectual
skills
improves
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improve
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 in
group
activities
. The main reasons behind agreeing to the fact are –
Firstly
,
group
activities
 generally include
interaction
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the interaction
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 of ideas within the
group
.
People
 within the peer share thoughts with one another.
Thus
,
this
improve
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improves
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 one’s critical ability thinking
skills
.
For example
, If a
person
 is writing
on
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apply
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a book in a
group
then
 he/she will definitely share ideas with his colleagues and
these
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 exchange of ideas will enhance his/her book.
Secondly
, In
group
activities
 , a
person
 gets opportunities to new
people
 which ultimately helps him in all aspects of life. If a
person
 meets new
people
,
then
 his/her social bonding will increase. Generally , society recognizes a
person
 who is active in
group
activities
.
Last
 but not
the
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least ,
Group
 discussions enrich us with better cultural and social understanding. In groups,
people
 from different cultural backgrounds
works
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 together,
therefore
 cultural understanding develops between the peer.
For example
, if in a
group
activity
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activity,
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 a
person
 from North India works closely with a
person
 from South India,
then
 there are chances that both the
person
 will take a glance at each other’s culture enhancing their cultural bonds. In Conclusion, Interaction
skills
, Social understanding and cultural understanding
skills
improves
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improve
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 when working in
group
activities
.
Hence
,
group
activities
 are more fruitful than individual
activity
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activities
show examples
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intellectual skills
  • group activities
  • collaborative learning
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • communication
  • interpersonal skills
  • diverse perspectives
  • creativity
  • individual study
  • personal reflection
  • autonomy
  • learning styles
  • approaches
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