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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether
students
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 should
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 something that they like or something that will be useful in the future. Some
people
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 believe that only subjects related to science and technology are necessary and every other major is not useful. In
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 essay, I will explain why
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 have different opinions on the same topic and present my
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 of seeing
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 subject. To start with,
students
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 should be able to choose what subject they want to
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 because
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 would be happier.
People
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 are always happier when they do something that they like.
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, studying a major that a student likes would prevent
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 for depression and would help with mental health. So,
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 who live in a country where everyone can choose what they want to
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 would simply be more contemptuous.
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,
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 should be able to choose what they want to
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 because of their capability. Not everyone is born to be an engineer or a scientist. Some
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 are simply better at creating art.
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 issue would lead to the quality of employees would get worse and
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 would not be passionate about their job. It is better to let employees do something that they like, and
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 quality of a product will be more excellent.
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, knowing that the country has enough science and technology specialists would lower
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 rates.
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, the country would increase their economy and prevent
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 rates.
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, Lithuania has too many lawyers and
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 number is not needed.
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 leads to
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, but if
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 cannot choose what they want to
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,
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 problem will be solved. The country’s economic progress would increase if
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 would not have the ability to choose their major and fewer
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 would not have jobs. Having considered both views, I think everyone should be allowed to choose their subject because
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 would be happier and more passionate about their major and the
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 issue should be solved differently.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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