The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The pie chart displays the information about average percentages accountable for
in
normal meals which contains Change preposition
of
Sodium
Saturated fat, and added Use synonyms
sugar
which could be cause for unhealthy at high amount of intake. Calibration of meals done in percentage.
Looking from Use synonyms
Linking Words
overall
perspective, it is readily Add an article
an overall
the overall
appearent
that the contribution of dinner in saturated fatCorrect your spelling
apparent
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is
large
portion. The added Add an article
a large
sugar
subscription of snacks Use synonyms
are
close to just beneath the half.
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is
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sodium
content of lunch is 29% of the total. Add an article
the sodium
Further
, Linking Words
considerable
portion, just more than Correct article usage
a considerable
one
Correct determiner usage
a
forth
of responsible Correct your spelling
fourth
in
saturated fat in lunch. The added Change preposition
for
sugar
amount of snacks is 42% when compared to other meals.
In Use synonyms
the
breakfast, Correct article usage
apply
sodium
added Use synonyms
sugar
and saturated fat amounts behave Use synonyms
like
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apply
similar
to each other. The breakfast contributes 14% in Change the word
similarly
Sodium
and 16% in Saturated fat.
The lunch accounts for 29% Use synonyms
in
Change preposition
of
Sodium
, 26% Use synonyms
in
Saturated fat, and 19% Change preposition
of
in
added Change preposition
of
sugar
sequentially. Use synonyms
Eventhough
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Even
,
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apply
added
Correct word choice
though added
sugar
volume is high in snacks, Use synonyms
Sodium
and Saturated fat contain 14% and 21% respectively.Use synonyms
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