The bar chart shows the expectation to change of European young people in the next 20 years in 5 different areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the expectation to change of European young people in the next 20 years in 5 different areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphic illustrates the change
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various life support sectors
according to
young
european
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in the two decades. The analysed areas are health, air
quality
, water
quality
, food
quality
, and people communication. The unit is measured by percentage. The general trends for rather
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fluctuate
between the five trends over the years.
According to
the bar chart, the amount of air
quality
is the least to improve. With
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less than
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22% chance of being improved.The second least area which was likely to have a growth was the health and the water
quality
sectors, with
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of 40%
improving
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and
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% contrast of
declining
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over the years.
In contrast
to most of the segments
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were declining, food
quality
and people communication reached
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peak
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around 45% and 63%
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respectively
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. Following
through
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this
, these two areas are the only few areas which were likely to be improved in the next 20 years between the five sectors
according to
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youngster. The
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Vocabulary: Replace the words quality with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "improve" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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