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Band 5.5

On a recent holiday, you lost a valuable item. Fortunately, you have a travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter: 1)describe the lost item. 2)Explain how you lost it 3)Tell the insurance company what you would like them to do

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I am writing a report
the
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 loss of my valuable item of your express train. The item is a small leather purse of
the
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 blue colour the brand name is Limelight embossed on the front side.
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, a tiny teddy bear is hung with the purse. Inside of the wallet my credit cards and driving licence
all
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 in my name. There is
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 50 dollars
money
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 in all. I have lost between 4:15 to 4:30 pm
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 travelling from Rawalpindi experss to Islamabd on 17th March. If I recall correctly, I was in the first carriage sitting on the second row . I would like to say that if you find
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 do let me contact with my cell phone. My phone number is 099 304 2442. Could you please call me if you find my wallet? Whenever you find just call me I will collect by myself from your office. I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Yours Faithfully,

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task response
Address the insurance company directly and provide a clear request for action.
coherence cohesion
Use appropriate and consistent paragraphing to improve clarity and coherence.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary to express ideas more precisely and effectively.
grammatical range
Use a wider variety of sentence structures and grammatical forms to demonstrate a higher level of language proficiency.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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