You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

You should write at least 150 words.
The Pie Chart depicted here shows the trend in a
particualr
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particular
country
how
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in how
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working adults spend their
time
on extra activities in five decades. In 1958, Working adults
spend
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spent
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third
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a third
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of their
time
on
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working and 32
percent
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per cent
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of
time
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their time
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on
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sleeping. Comparing
this
to 2008, people spend more
time
on
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working(42%) rather than sleeping(25%). The
time
to travel to work
also
varies in different
time
frames - with 2
percent
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per cent
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time
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spent
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spend
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spent
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on travelling to 8
percent
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per cent
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time
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spent
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spend
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spent
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on travelling. The
time
spent
on
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hanging out with friends/family in 1958 is considerably higher than the
time
spent in 2008. 8
percent
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per cent
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of
working
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the working
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population
tends
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tended
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to relax at home in 1958 and comparing
this
to 2008 which is significantly more in number. The
time
spent
on
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staying at home in 2008 for working adults
is
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was
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13
percent
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per cent
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. There
is
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was
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only
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a small
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small
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a small
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increase
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in
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on
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in
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the amount
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amount
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the amount
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of
time
spent
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apply
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on
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playing sports
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between
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in
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between
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1958 and 2008.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • activities
  • working adults
  • summarise
  • report
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • time spent
  • work-related
  • leisure
  • personal care
  • travel
  • noticeable trends
  • over a period
  • devoted
  • significant changes
  • contrast
  • compare
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