You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.
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The Pie Chart depicted here shows the trend in a
particualr
country Correct your spelling
particular
how
working adults spend their Change preposition
in how
time
on extra activities in five decades.
In 1958, Working adults Use synonyms
spend
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spent
third
of their Correct article usage
a third
time
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on
working and 32 Change preposition
apply
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percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
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time
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their time
on
sleeping. Comparing Change preposition
apply
this
to 2008, people spend more Linking Words
time
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on
working(42%) rather than sleeping(25%). The Change preposition
apply
time
to travel to work Use synonyms
also
varies in different Linking Words
time
frames - with 2 Use synonyms
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percent
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per cent
time
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Replace the word
spent
spend
on travelling to 8 Wrong verb form
spent
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percent
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per cent
time
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Replace the word
spent
spend
on travelling.
The Wrong verb form
spent
time
spent Use synonyms
on
hanging out with friends/family in 1958 is considerably higher than the Change preposition
apply
time
spent in 2008. 8 Use synonyms
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percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
working
population Add an article
the working
tends
to relax at home in 1958 and comparing Wrong verb form
tended
this
to 2008 which is significantly more in number. The Linking Words
time
spent Use synonyms
on
staying at home in 2008 for working adults Change preposition
apply
is
13 Wrong verb form
was
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percent
.
There Change the spelling
per cent
is
only Wrong verb form
was
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a small
small
increase Correct article usage
a small
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in
on
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in
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the amount
amount
of Correct article usage
the amount
time
spent Use synonyms
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apply
on
playing sports Change preposition
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in
1958 and 2008.Change preposition
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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