You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society? You should write at least 250 words.

Majority
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of
students
across the globe are not keen
in
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on
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selecting
science
as a major or an elective in
univerisities
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universities
. There can be several factors that influence the
students
and let us see the major reasons for
this
problem.
Firstly
,
Difficulty
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the Difficulty
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level of understanding
science
is a major cause.
Students
who are not very good
in
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at
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math can't understand
science
properly as
this
is
the
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a
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fact.
Also
, Maths is considered as "Queen of
Science
". Concepts involved in
science
requires
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require
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a deeper level of understanding and
also
it involves time
on understanding
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to understand
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it
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apply
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. Without strong foundational levels of
science
, Engineering will become very
diffcult
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difficult
as it
invovle
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involve
involves
complex concepts and methodologies of
science
. As we said above,
foundation
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the foundation
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should be strong and where can
this
be built - especially in schools
.
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Basics of
Science
should be properly
nutured
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nurtured
to the
students
in schools which make them eventually love
science
. Unfortunately,
Lack
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the Lack
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of
science
labs and no proper teachers to make
science
interesting is seen across the world nations including
developed
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in developed
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countries like
USA
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the USA
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,
UK
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the UK
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etc. Owing to the
lack
of facilities,
Students
nowadays
also
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are also
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keen on other subjects
also
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apply
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like Art, Literature and Commerce. Even
this
can
attribute
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be attributed
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lack
of
students
not selecting
science
in university. As mentioned earlier,
Science
is considered as a gateway to
understand
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understanding
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engineering. Engineering is all around us.
This
engineering tends to solve
the
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apply
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complex
real word
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real-world
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problems and
lack
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a lack
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of
students
taking up
science
will
end up
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result
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in
shortage
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a shortage
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of engineers which becomes a serious trouble for the future of the nations.
Finally
,
Science
is very important for all of us. Even for music or in any field, without
science
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science,
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we can't understand the world around us properly. But,
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soley
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solely
depends upon the
students
to choose their own
interest
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interests
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and
also
for educational organizations to make
science
fascianting
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fascinating
.
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The essay does not fully address the reasons for the lack of interest in science subjects and its effects on society. It lacks depth and thorough analysis.
coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear logical structure and the points are not well-supported with relevant examples and arguments. The introduction and conclusion are present, but the body paragraphs lack coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
The lexical resource is limited, and there is a lack of variety in vocabulary. The essay uses repetitive language and lacks precise and accurate word choices.
grammatical range
There are several grammatical errors throughout the essay, including subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and sentence structure. The range of grammar structures is limited, and the errors affect the overall clarity of the essay.

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