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A large emphasis is given to the education in young generation.Government covers all of the free educational activities. to what extent do you agree or disagree

#emphasis #education #generation #government #activities
Education
 is the foremost important feature in the
country
.
Government
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The government
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 is accountable for the expenses in
this
 field.Nowadays, the main emphasis is given to
younger
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the younger
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 generation. Proponents of
this
 idea claim that it is essential for the nation's
reputation
 and
tourism
.
Recent
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A recent
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 article, conducted by scientists at Wharton University, states that
education
 plays a substantial role in
countries'
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a country's
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reputation
.It discusses that it has
substantial
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a substantial
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 impact on the
reputation
.
Due to
 proper
education
 present in the
country
, humans are more likely to be literate.
Thus
, people will be able to obtain jobs that are demanding in the job market.
As a result
, the economy of the
country
 grows and obtains
good
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a good
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reputation
.
For instance
, China- being the leader in
education
 globally, has obtained an excellent
education
 over
years
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the years
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.
Tourism
 is
important
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an important
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 feature
for
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of
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 the
country
 as well.
As a result
 of growth in
economy
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the economy
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,
tourism
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the tourism
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 threshold rises simultaneously. People tend to immigrate to countries that have high
tourism
 levels.
Highest
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The highest
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tourism
 levels come from
education
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the education
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 of the
country
 as well.
Thus
, more people are expected to immigrate which
rises
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raises
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 the
reputation
 and economy.
To sum up
,
education
 plays an enormous role in the
country
.
Government
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The government
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 should be accountable for providing and emphasizing
education
 to
younger
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the younger
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 generation since it
increase
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increases
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 the
reputation
 and
tourism
 of the nation.
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