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A large emphasis is given to the education in young generation.Government covers all of the free educational activities. to what extent do you agree or disagree

Education
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 is the foremost important feature in the
country
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.
Government
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 is accountable for the expenses in
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 field.Nowadays, the main emphasis is given to
younger
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the younger
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 generation. Proponents of
this
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 idea claim that it is essential for the nation's
reputation
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 and
tourism
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.
Recent
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A recent
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 article, conducted by scientists at Wharton University, states that
education
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 plays a substantial role in
countries'
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a country's
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reputation
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.It discusses that it has
substantial
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a substantial
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 impact on the
reputation
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.
Due to
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 proper
education
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 present in the
country
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, humans are more likely to be literate.
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, people will be able to obtain jobs that are demanding in the job market.
As a result
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, the economy of the
country
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 grows and obtains
good
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a good
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reputation
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.
For instance
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, China- being the leader in
education
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 globally, has obtained an excellent
education
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 over
years
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the years
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.
Tourism
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 is
important
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an important
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 feature
for
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of
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 the
country
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 as well.
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 of growth in
economy
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the economy
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,
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tourism
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the tourism
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 threshold rises simultaneously. People tend to immigrate to countries that have high
tourism
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 levels.
Highest
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The highest
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tourism
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 levels come from
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education
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the education
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 of the
country
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 as well.
Thus
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, more people are expected to immigrate which
rises
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raises
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 the
reputation
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 and economy.
To sum up
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,
education
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 plays an enormous role in the
country
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.
Government
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The government
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 should be accountable for providing and emphasizing
education
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 to
younger
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the younger
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 generation since it
increase
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increases
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 the
reputation
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 and
tourism
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 of the nation.

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