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You recently heard about an international company that you would like to work for. Write a job application letter and say: • How did you hear about the company • What skills and qualification do you have • Why do you want to work there

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing about an employee vacancy at the international company Lord of Heaven. As an office worker or female secretary. Your advertisement in
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 morning’s Post for a female manager prompts me to offer you my qualifications for
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 position. The post stated that the employee must speak three languages and have a diploma. Like
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many young women, I am looking for a position. I want to get started, at the bottom, perhaps, but started. I am 27 years of age
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 and have five years’ experience in my present post. I am a graduate of Oxford University
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 and have recently completed the business course at Harvard University and have a thorough knowledge of the English language. I enclose a resume and
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my recommendation. As a regard salary, I leave it to you to decide after experience of my capacity. The only reason why I am leaving the present position is to gain more experience in international trade I hope
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 will be kind enough to consider my application favourably. Regards, Mia Parker
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task response
Make sure to address the specific job position and company name in the letter. Provide relevant qualifications and skills as per the job requirements. Use a more formal tone and language for a job application letter.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear logical structure within the letter. Use appropriate paragraphing and organize your ideas in a coherent manner. Improve the greeting and closing to make it more professional.
lexical resource
Expand your lexical resource by using a wider range of vocabulary. Use formal and appropriate language suitable for a job application letter. Avoid informal and colloquial language.
grammatical range
Work on grammatical accuracy and range. Ensure correct use of grammar, punctuation, and sentence structures throughout the letter. Consider using complex and compound sentences for variety.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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