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The graph below shows the amount of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002.

The graph below shows the amount of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002.
#amount #goods #uk
The given line chart
depict
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depicts
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 the four types of different cargo; road, water, rail, and pipeline (counted in
million
tones
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tonnes
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) shipped in the UK between 1974 and 2002.
Overall
, transferring road to
UK
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the UK
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 showed the biggest
amount
 among
four
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the four
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,
while
 the pipeline in the opposite.
Firstly
, the
amount
 of
road
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roads
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 sent to Britain was always above 60
million
tones
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tonnes
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,
started
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starting
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 from about 70
million
tones
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tonnes
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 in 1974 and slowly
increased
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increasing
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 in the following four years, and it experienced the
fluctuative
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fluctuating
 until achieved
the
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a
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 peak rising in 2002 which was up to 100
million
tones
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tonnes
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.
Next,
the
amount
 of water began from under 40
million
 and
extremely
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apply
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grew in 1982
in
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to
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 about 55 up to 60
millions
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million
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tones
, and steadily grew, but sharply
deacreased
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decreased
 in 1998 with
the
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an
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amount
about
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of about
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 45
million
tones
.
Sebsequently
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Subsequently
,
trasnporting
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transporting
 rail started from 40
millions
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million
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 but always decreased below 40
million
tones
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tonnes
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 until
rised
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rose
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 again in 2002 which was about 41
million
tones
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tonnes
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. Meanwhile,
pipeline
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the pipeline
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, in the beginning, showed
the
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a
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 less
amount
 which was under 20
millions
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million
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, and sharply grew in 1982 above 20
millions
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million
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 but reduced in 1994,
then
 underwent the same condition until 2002 with 20
millions
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million
show examples
tones
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tonnes
show examples
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tones, amount, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • amount
  • transported
  • UK
  • increased
  • significantly
  • 28-year period
  • first decade
  • steady increase
  • significant jump
  • highest point
  • gradual decline
  • minor increase
  • dropped
  • similar level
  • goods
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