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The map illustrates the between and predicted future Islip town centre.

The map illustrates the between and predicted future Islip town centre.
#future #islip #town #centre
The maps show the present condition of Islip town centre which
planned
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is planned
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 to be developed in the future.
Overall
, there will be a construction of
divided
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a divided
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 highway and new housing. Several facilities will be built,
such
 as
bus
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a bus
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 station, shopping centre and car
park
.
Dual
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A dual
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 carriageway will be constructed in the future
surround
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surrounding
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 the
area
. The town will have
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a pedestrians
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pedestrians
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pedestrian
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area
 which
is
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apply
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currently
function
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functions
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 as the main road. Shops
area
 and countryside in the north will redeveloped into a bus station, shopping centre, car
park
 and new housing. The new housing in the north will be connected with a road from the east. The housing in the middle and south
area
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areas
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 will be separated
with
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by
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 a dual highway.
Currently
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Currently,
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 the
park
 is bigger than the future planned and will be passed by the dual carriageway
in
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on
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 the east side. The new housing will be built
in
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on
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 the west side of the
park
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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