The diagrams show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon

The diagrams show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon
The illustration shows how the cyclical
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a large species of fish called the
salmon
.
Overall
, the lifecycle is
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process and contains four cyclical phases, starting with
salmon
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eggs on a pebbly riverbed and ending with the birth of a new fry.
To begin
with, eggs are produced by the
salmon
and it takes five or six months for the eggs to hatch into fry. After approximately four years, these baby
salmon
will live in the lower, faster-flowing waters of their river. During
this
time they measure around three and eight centimetres. By the time
salmon
reach twelve to fifteen centimetres, they are named “smolt”, and at
this
time they migrate
further
downriver into the open sea. At around five years, the
salmon
will have grown to become adult size, which is between seventy and seventy-six centimetres.
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begin swimming back to their birthplace and the cycle starts anew.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Life cycle
  • Spawning
  • Freshwater
  • Juvenile
  • Fry
  • Adaptation
  • Migration
  • Smolt
  • Rivers
  • Ocean
  • Challenge
  • Growth
  • Return journey
  • Hatching ground
  • Perilous
  • Upstream
  • Obstacle
  • Ecological impact
  • Preservation
  • Disturbance
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