Your local municipality is thinking about two different projects for its local residents. An amusement park or a local theatre. Choose between options A and B. Why do you prefer your option? Explain the reasons for your choice, Option A: Amusement Park: The amusement park will be open for families, will have a playground and a water park. Option B: Local Theatre: The local

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I do see the benefit of constructing theatre.I opine that the

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park has more benefits

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in population these days many agricultural lands in our locality are converted into

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residential

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private

companys

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enough space leftover to construct big parks and

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, the locals are travelling with their children to

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cities to spend time in parks.

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in our community will help parents to access

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.Many families are stressed

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might help them to recover by killing

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numerous jobs for locals.

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, it can be said that there are more advantages than drawbacks.Again,these are my personal

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support the decision taken by the community.

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