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In some countries, there is not enough recycling of waste materials(e.g.. paper, glass, and cans). What are the reasons, and what can be done to solve this problem?

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Over the decades , society has undergone a significant transition in the realm of recycling. As it plays a crucial role in everyone's life., It has been proven
extremly
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extremely
 productive for many nations to reduce waste
material's
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 through recycling items
such
 as plastic ,
papers
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 and glass.
However
, some undeveloped countries are struggling to address the issue of recycling.
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 my perspective, there
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 multiple factors and potential
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 that
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 will explore with pertinent examples and a clear conclusive summary.
To begin
 with, one of the prominent
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causes
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 behind the growing countries is
corrupt
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the corrupt
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 administration of
nation
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the nation
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, playing negative politics among people just for their
benefits
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for example
 Pakistan is now in the headlines of
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 because of its cheap leaders.
Moreover
, Lack of
insufficent
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insufficient
sufficient
 infrastructure to initiate recycling industries , as it
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 the
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use
 of
non biodegradable
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 things.
Furthermore
, people are not well aware of
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the environmental
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 benefits of recycling or
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the negative
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 impacts of improper waste disposal.
On the other hand
, there are ample solutions that can be
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implemented
 to get
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 of
this
 issue. The most predominant is
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the enforcement
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 of recycling laws which
assits
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assists
assist
 the nation
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 down the
use
 of
non disposal
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 things.
Secondly
,
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 programme to inform the people about its benefits and
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environmental
 advantages.
Consequentely
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Consequently
, promote the
use
 of alternate biodegradable items and install
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 bins.
Apart from
this
, restrict the
use
 of plastic and
instead
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that
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expand the material that can be recycled.
To conclude
, recycling is an indispensable aspect of our living standard, as it protects our environment from
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detrimental
 substances.
nonetheless
, ample
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solutions still exist to resolve
this
 concern.
Therefore
, it is
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imperative
 for the government to
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prioritise
the preservation of mother nature as 
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prefererence
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preference
.
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