The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people who consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK over 8 years, which is from 2001 to 2008.
The Bar diagram gives
informations
regarding the Change the wording
information
pieces of information
proportion
of children
, male and female in UK
, Correct article usage
the UK
ate
five types of fruits and vegetables in a day between 2001 to 2008.
Correct pronoun usage
who ate
Overall
, the diagram showed a stable increasing trend while
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the female
female
had Fix the agreement mistake
females
highest
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the highest
proportion
among
all years.
In detail, the pattern of the Change preposition
of
proportion
of how many agricultural products are finished by people had remain
a Change the verb form
remained
plateum
and showed Correct your spelling
platinum
plate
a
increasing trend.The lowest Change the article
an
consumtion
year was 2001 between 2001 to 2008. Correct your spelling
consumption
Children
was
the lowest Change the verb form
were
proportion
. They consumed around 12.5 in 2001. While
men were in the second places
among 3 types of people. They finished around 17.5 in 2001, Fix the agreement mistake
place
while
women ate the most fruits and vegetables. They finish around 22.5 in total. The consumtion
amount of Correct your spelling
consumption
male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
children
hit the
peak Correct article usage
a
at
2007. Change preposition
in
Children
increased to 26 dramactically
and Correct your spelling
dramatically
male
rose towards 27.
The amount Fix the agreement mistake
males
fruits
and vegetables Change preposition
of fruits
intook
by female were the largest Correct your spelling
taken
among
8 years. The Change preposition
in
proportionof
consumed hit the peak Correct your spelling
proportion
at
2006, which achieved 35. Change preposition
in
Although
the number slightly dropped to 30 in 2008. It was still the highest among male
, Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
and Fix the agreement mistake
females
children
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