The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six - art related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The bar chart illustrates the information of university

students

who

studies

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studied

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six different

subject

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subjects

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in the year 2011 in a European country.

Overall

, the female

students

are higher in number in five subjects except one.

Whereas

, male

students

proportion is only higher in Art and Design course. English language and

litreature

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literature

is the course that

majority

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the majority

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of graduates are enrolled in.

To begin

with, the highest proportion of

student

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students

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studying

English

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the English

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language and

litreature

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literature

about

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is about

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250

female

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females

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and 230

males

Secondly

, Communication and Media Stud is the subject

students

are second highest enrolled in nearly 210

males

and 230

females

Thirdly

, the number of

students

studying Linguistics is about 240

females

and 180

males

On the other hand

, the only

one

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apply

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subject the male

students

are

excessive

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than

female

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females

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is Art and Design 150

females

and 190

males

Least

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The least

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childrens

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children

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are joined in

other

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the other

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two courses names

Philosphy

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Philosophy

and History and Archeology 50

males

, 150

females

, 90

males

and 110

females

respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, males, females with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

162 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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gender distribution
imbalance
participation
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significant
relatively balanced
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career opportunities
art-related subjects
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The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six - art related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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