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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products and the current price for certain food available on the market place. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products and the current price for certain food available on the market place. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
#minutes #show #information #willingness #insect #products #price #food #market #place #report #university #lecturer #summarise #features #comparisons
The map describes
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the ethusiasm
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ethusiasm
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enthusiasm
 of
people
 across
the
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various
countries
on
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for
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 accepting insects as a source of
food
 owing to the current
food
 availability.
The
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Central and South America shows more interest
on
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in
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 accepting
insect
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insects
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 as
a
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food
a portion of food
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food
 when
comparing
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compared
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 to the other regions of the planet. In North America, Nearly 35% of
people
 in the United States are readily accepting
the
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insect products with Mexico being
in
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on
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a
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the
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 top list with
amount
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the amount
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 of
people
 willing to accept
is
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apply
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more than the
amount
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number
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 of
people
 unwilling to accept. 71
percent
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per cent
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 of Mexico's population
are
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is
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 quite curious about it and in
fact
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fact,
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 the most
favorable
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favourable
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 country to accept insect-
food
 products in the world. In South America, Two
countries
shows
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show
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 significant interest
on
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in
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 insects with 58% of
Peruvinas
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Peruvians
 and 45% of Brazilians. In these both
countries
,
Willigness
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willingness
 to accept is considerably high. In Asia, Chinese and Thailand
people
 are eager
on accepting
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to accept
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insect-
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insect food
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food
 with
russia
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Russia
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, japan and
india
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India
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 showing less interest and
japan
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Japan
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 being least
to
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willing to
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 accept it as a
food
 source. In Europe and Oceania, approximately 30-35 percent of
people
 are interested
with
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in
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countries
 like
UK
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the UK
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(36%), Spain(33%) and Australia (34%)
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, countries, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global willingness
  • insect products
  • current prices
  • marketplace
  • highlighting significant patterns
  • outliers
  • regions
  • discrepancy
  • non-insect-based food items
  • general pattern
  • comparisons
  • notable differences
  • traditional food items
  • main trends
  • implications
  • further research
  • consumption
  • price variation
  • food availability
  • significant
  • observed
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