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The chart below shows the value of one country export in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in value og export in 2016

The chart below shows the value of one country export in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in value og export in 2016
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The provided bar graph reflects the amount of money that was earned from exporting several
products
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 in one country in two different years 2015 and 2016
while
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 the table chart demonstrates the proportion change in the related
value
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 of each category.
According to
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 the given
charts
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 there were five types of
products
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: petroleum
products
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, engineered
products
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,
germs
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 and
jewellery
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, agricultural
products
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, and textiles.
Overall
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, after a thorough analysis of the given graphs, it can be plainly viewed that whilst petroleum
products
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 were in the first place as the most commonly exported
products
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, textiles came
last
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.
Additionally
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, there was a gradual increase in the
value
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 of each product except for
germs
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 and
jewellery
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 in 2015 and 2016. In the beginning, regarding the bar chart,
whereas
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 petroleum
products
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 were at the top as the most exported product in 2015 and 2016 and scored around 62 and 65
billion
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dollars
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, respectively, engendered items were in the second position which recorded about 56 and 62
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015 and 2016, respectively.
In addition
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 to that
germs
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 and
jewellery
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 registered approximately 43
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015 and about 41
billion
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dollars
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 in 2016, followed by agriculture
products
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 which hit slightly more than 30
billion
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dollars
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 in both years.
Furthermore
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, moving to the table graph, the data suggests that the
value
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 of textiles experienced a dramatic increase ( 15.24 per cent ), followed by engineered items that witnessed a significant upsurge in
the
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value
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 as well (8.5%).
Moreover
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, It is worth noticing that
germs
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 and
jewellery
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products
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 were the only
products
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 that went through a sharp reduction to 5.18% in 2015 and 2016.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words products, value, germs, jewellery, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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