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The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010.

The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010.
#proportion #energy #countries
The bar chart
depict
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shows
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 that the
renew
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renewable
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 energy
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has in
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in
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an
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over all
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overall
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 supply in
Australia
,
Sweden
,Iceland,
Turkey
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and Turkey
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 from 1997 to 2010.
overall
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Overall
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,
Australia
 was
lowest
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the lowest
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 other than
two
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the two
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countries
 and
also
Sweden
less
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has less
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 supply
moreover
,Iceland and
Turkey
was
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were
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 almost higher.
To begin
 with,
Australia
 was approximately at 10,8,5 in 1997,2000 and 2010 and
Sweden
 under at 10 lower was
the
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Australia
 in 1997, in 2000 it was
little
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a little
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more high
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higher
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.
Furthermore
,Iceland sharply increased than other
countries
 45 in 1997,60 in 2000 and 70 in 2010 was highest
instead
 of them.
In addition
,
Turkey
 was
nearby
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near
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the
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apply
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Sweden
just
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by just
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 close
of
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to
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 40 in 1997,in 2000 almost 40 and in 2010 was 32, it was second of
other
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the other
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 two
countries
.
Sweden
 was dramatically higher than other
countries
and
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apply
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second was
Turkey
and
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apply
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third was
Sweden
 and
last
 was
Australia
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, sweden, turkey, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • renewable energy
  • total energy supply
  • percentage
  • overall
  • changed
  • increases
  • decreases
  • fluctuating
  • trend
  • highest
  • lowest
  • significant
  • commitment
  • sustainability
  • environmental protection
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