The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 

2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
The graph shows data from 1980 with forecasts up to 2030 on the US population’s
energy
consumption. Generally, in 1980, petrol and
oil
were the dominant
energy
sources,
while
nuclear, solar, wind and
hydropower
were the least utilized fuels.
Additionally
, in 2030, gasoline and
oil
are forecasted to remain the leading sources of
energy
,
whereas
hydropower
is predicted to take the bottom-most position. Over a 28-year period, starting
at
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1980, petrol and
oil
rose in consumption from 35
quadrillion
units
to about 40
quadrillion
units
. Coal and natural gas performed
similarly
, as both increased from around 17
quadrillion
units
and 20
quadrillion
units
, respectively, to about 23
quadrillion
units
. During the same period, nuclear
energy
gradually climbed from nearly three
quadrillion
units
to seven
quadrillion
units
,
while
solar, wind and
hydropower
fuels remained static at approximately three
quadrillion
units
. Over the duration of the forecasts, ranging from 2008 to 2030, petrol and
oil
consumption are expected to elevate up to nearly 48
quadrillion
units
. Coal and natural gas are estimated to increase up to about 32
quadrillion
units
and 25
quadrillion
units
, respectively.
Finally
, nuclear, solar, wind, and
hydropower
energy
will stay nearly constant throughout the projected period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, oil, hydropower, quadrillion, units with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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