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The line graph shows the percentage of employment in 3 sections from 1970 to 1995.

The line graph shows the percentage of employment in 3 sections from 1970 to 1995.
#line #percentage #employment #sections
The line
graph
 depicts the information about the number of employment rate which was shown in three different parts over a 25-year
period
 between 1970 to 1995 after analyzing the
graph
, it is clearly seen that the
graph
show
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shows
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 massive
flutuations
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fluctuations
 from the start till the end of
period
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the period
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 In 1995 the ratio of
skill
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skilled
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 workers
were
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was
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approximately
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to
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apply
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8
percent
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per cent
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 after that it rose to its peak and saw a major dipped reaching
to
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almost 10
percent
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per cent
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 after a decade it
show
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 an inclined trend for the next three years after which again it
start
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starts
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 its downward direction and remained there to almost 12
percent
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per cent
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for half a decade
furthermore
, after staying
for
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at
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 12
percent
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per cent
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, the employment figure saw
major
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a major
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increased
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 before steep down to nearly equal to 14
percent
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per cent
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 after which it inclined upward and
keep
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kept
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 rising in the given
period
 of time (2015)
overall
, the
graph
show
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shows
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 a fluctuation before the starting and ending
period
however
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employment
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the employemnt
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employemnt
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employment
 rate
jump
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jumped
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 from
lower
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a lower
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 figure to
high
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a high
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 figure almost for three decades
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, period, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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