The first chart below shows how energy is used in average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emission which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emission which result from this energy use.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first pie chart illustrates for what standard families in Australia are using energy in their homes and the second one gives information about the carbon emission resulting from it.
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, it can be seen that the most sufficient energy usage in those households refers to air and
water
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heating, which are
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the major reasons for greenhouse gas emissions,
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the utilization of other appliances. Cooling has the smallest proportion in both charts. The biggest amount of energy, 72%, in a house or apartment is used for increasing the temperature of air (42%), or
water
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(30%), followed by other devices with 15% and refrigerators with 7%. Lighting and cooling are
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, with 4% and 2%, respectively.
On the other hand
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, almost half of the carbon dioxide issues concern the heating processes with 32% for
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and 15% for
water
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. The usage of other appliances is responsible for 28% of the emissions, followed by 14% for fridges.
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, lamps and cooling have with lowest scores with 8% and 3%, respectively.
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