It is more important to plant trees in town and cities than to build more houses. Do you agree or disagree?

Owing to modernization, industrialization is at its peak in urban areas
hence
, umpteen numbers of vegetation is being eradicated to replace it with not only residential buildings but
also
corporate skyscrapers.
This
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growing numbers calls for
reverse
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a reverse
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process where vegetation is given priority
instead
of constructing homes.
Therefore
, I firmly believe in upshifting the number of
trees
and
plants
in metropolitan cities.
To begin
with,
although
increment
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in houses and other buildings may benefit people financially
as well as
socially
however
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,
in contrast
, the spike in
environment polluting
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bodies might result in deprivation of not only economic status but
also
health
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conditions of the citizens residing in towns.
Therefore
, strict measures must be taken to promote the practices involving
plantation
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the plantation
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of numerous
trees
and
plants
to sustain the environment.
Moreover
,
health
deteriorating effects on
growing
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the growing
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population by businesses and other entities can be mitigated by conserving biodiversity. For
instane
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instance
, the factories that are harming the
health
of
residence
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in a city can be minimized by growing ample
trees
and
lessen
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building houses and other
instituitions
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institutions
. Adding to it, the issue of searching
and
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consuming safe fruits and vegetables can
be vanished
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as folks can enjoy vegetation grown by themselves.
Furthermore
,
along with
humans,
trees
and
plants
also
act as a boon for animals and birds.
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the fresh air and the shade from
trees
can impact global warming on a positive scale. To exemplify, by adding more
trees
locals can enjoy fruits from the
trees
surrounding them and birds can find homes in them, enhancing biodiversity.
To conclude
, the cities ought to be restored with the help of umpteen numbers of
trees
and
plants
.
This
will
help
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help to curb the hazardous effects
to
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the environment by human activities. Benefits from
plantation
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the plantation
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of
trees
ranges
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from enriching
health
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the health
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, providing organic options for food, providing shelter to birds and many other.
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