Part 1 You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter: - explain your situation - describe your problems - tell him/her when you think you can start Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,
Dear Mr. Sam,
My name is Gurpinder and I am working as an assistant manager in one of your stores which is located in Kanata. I am writing
this
letter to inform the few issues that we should focus on.
There are couple
of things which are not working properly which causes not only insecurity but Add an article
a couple
also
makes our job hard.
To begin
with, the rest room
tap Correct your spelling
restroom
is
not working properly Verb problem
has
from
the Change preposition
for
last
week. Secondly
, the lock of the door is also
broken, therefore
, we have to take the help of the
another person Remove the article
apply
for standing
outside Change preposition
to stand
while
we are using
. Correct pronoun usage
using it
Last
but not least, there has been a
issue with Change the article
an
refrigerator
as sometimes the temperature is too high. Add an article
the refrigerator
Thus
, we have to keep an eye on the products.
As a solution, we can focus on couple
of things namely Change the article
a couple
book
an appointment with Wrong verb form
booking
plumber
Add an article
a plumber
the plumber
as well as
carpenter
to solve the issue of both leaking water and Add an article
a carpenter
lock
system. At Correct article usage
the lock
last
, there should be some metting
on how to use things properly which will save Correct your spelling
meeting
our
money in future.
Yours sincerely,
Gurpinder Correct pronoun usage
us
kaur
Change the capitalization
Kaur
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task response
The response does not fully address the task. The letter fails to provide a suitable reason for not being able to start the new job next week.
coherence cohesion
The coherence and cohesion of the letter is poor. The ideas are not well organized and there are issues with paragraph structure and logical progression.
lexical resource
The lexical resource is limited and language use is not varied. There are also some inaccuracies in word choice and expression.
grammatical range
The grammatical range is limited and there are errors in sentence structure, verb tense, and article usage.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite