Part 1 You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter: - explain your situation - describe your problems - tell him/her when you think you can start Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Mr. Sam, My name is Gurpinder and I am working as an assistant manager in one of your stores which is located in Kanata. I am writing
this
letter to inform the few issues that we should focus on. There are
couple
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of things which are not working properly which causes not only insecurity but
also
makes our job hard.
To begin
with, the
rest room
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tap
is
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has
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not working properly
from
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the
last
week.
Secondly
, the lock of the door is
also
broken,
therefore
, we have to take the help of
the
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another person
for standing
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outside
while
we are
using
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.
Last
but not least, there has been
a
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issue with
refrigerator
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as sometimes the temperature is too high.
Thus
, we have to keep an eye on the products. As a solution, we can focus on
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of things namely
book
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an appointment with
plumber
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a plumber
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as well as
carpenter
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to solve the issue of both leaking water and
lock
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system. At
last
, there should be some
metting
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meeting
on how to use things properly which will save
our
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money in future. Yours sincerely, Gurpinder
kaur
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task response
The response does not fully address the task. The letter fails to provide a suitable reason for not being able to start the new job next week.
coherence cohesion
The coherence and cohesion of the letter is poor. The ideas are not well organized and there are issues with paragraph structure and logical progression.
lexical resource
The lexical resource is limited and language use is not varied. There are also some inaccuracies in word choice and expression.
grammatical range
The grammatical range is limited and there are errors in sentence structure, verb tense, and article usage.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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