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You have decided to change your profession and want to resign from your current job. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: • Tell him about your decision and its reasons; • Explain what you have learnt from your current job and how you feel about leaving it; • Ask for a letter of reference. Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ....,

#change #profession #job #manager #decision #learnt #reference #addresses
I am writing
this
 letter to inform you of
toughest
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 decision I am going to leave the company as my current contract ends next month . I have
been
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studied
master
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master's
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 degree in auditing and I completed so I got offered in
United
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the United
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Kingdom’s
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Kingdom
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 to work as an
auditour
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auditor
 It was
my
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apply
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one of my
dream
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dreams
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 to be an auditor so now I achieved my first dream . In
this
 company I
learend
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learned
learnt
 lots of skills not just
contains
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contained
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 in my job I learned about
comunication
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communication
 and team work I gained experience in accounting and finance management
therefore
 ,please accept my
resign
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 from
this
 organization as soon as possible I must
to
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travel to London end of November. Would you provide me experience letter and
recommendation
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a recommendation
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 letter for a new job as I worked over nine years ago
also
 I gained
the
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experience because of you and I am glad I had a boss good with me . I am looking forward to hearing from you I will keep in touch. Kind regards
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Task response
Task response: The letter lacks clarity and organization. Address the decision to resign, the reasons, and the request for a reference letter more explicitly.
Coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: A more logical and structured flow is needed. Use appropriate transition words and organize ideas into paragraphs more effectively.
Lexical resource
Lexical resource: Expand your vocabulary and use more formal language appropriate for a professional letter. Avoid informal and awkward phrasing.
Grammatical range
Grammatical range: Pay attention to sentence structure, verb tenses, and word choice. Use complex and varied sentence structures for better fluency.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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