Some people believe that employees should stay in the same job for the rest of their lives. Others think they should switch jobs at least once during their career. To what extent do you agree / disagree?

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In today's world, a debate has sparked with regard to employment. Some individuals believe that

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same occupation for a long period of

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meanwhile some think employees should change their

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at least

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point during their line of work.

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my opinion, more than staying focused

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should explore their options or follow their passion

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I believe that

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should

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at least

try changing their occupation at least

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during their career journey. In

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what extent I agree followed by a conclusion.

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stable work of

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employment

is a must for every person to earn an income to run their lives. Choosing the correct line of work

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various types of social and financial aspects.

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, as per my

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the community in my country

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social status purely based on the

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people

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do not get the ability

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what they desire because they are

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unable

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choosing a

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or staying in an

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employment

based on the community desire. In a nutshell, staying in the same

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for a

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might result in

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dissatisfaction and it can cause danger to mental health.

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, changing a

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will help

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to explore new pathways in their

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. Some

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might have a passion

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their own business

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and it should be encouraged.

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photography might want to start his own photography studio and

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completely

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allows a person to

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new duties and follow what he/she

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. In conclusion, every

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should be considered as a learning curve

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belive

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changing jobs

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one

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once

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in the career ladder would bring

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. The choice of changing

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employment

will bring more experience to an individual compared to sticking

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Complete response

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Some people believe that employees should stay in the same job for the rest of their lives. Others think they should switch jobs at least once during their career. To what extent do you agree / disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some feel that students should not have to take standardized tests in school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that it would be better for large companies in the industry to move to regional areas outside large urban cities. Do you think the advantages outweigh the advantageous.

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that in many cities around the world there are constant traffic jams. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from owning cars?

In the last century when a human astronaut arrived on the moon, He said “it is a big step for mankind”. But some people say it makes little or no difference to our daily life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a ‘fat tax’ is unfair and unnecessary. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.