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The diagram details the process of making clothes from plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram details the process of making clothes from plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram depicts the
process
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manufacturing
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of manufacturing
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 clothes from
platic
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plastic
bottles
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.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that there are 13 main stages which start
from
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with
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 making
plastic
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bottles
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 and end with manufacturing clothes by material.In
addtion
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addition
, only
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the
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second stage
when
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is when
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 people transport
bottles
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 and
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the
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third
require
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requires
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 durable time because they carry it and prepare ,
whereas
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 other processes can be
dony
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done
by
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with
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 different equipment.
To begin
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 with, people put
plastic
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bottles
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to
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into
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 the machine, after they transported
it
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them
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in
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to
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 the factory.
Subsequently
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, the staff should pay attention to preparing all equipment to start the
process
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 before sorting it.
Next
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The next
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 phase of
this
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process
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 is called cutting which
require
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requires
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 manual work from people when
plastic
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bottles
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 are put into a
plastic
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 grinder and broken down into particles.
Therefore
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, they
washing
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wash
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 it and
also
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 dry it
on
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in
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 the sun. Following that, it boiled and
also
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 stained before redeveloping into a yarn.
Subsequently
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, the next
process
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 can be very dangerous when they weaving it. Ultimately, it can be rolled and only after that become clothes.
However
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,
this
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process
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repeated
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is repeated
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 again as soon as consumers
will
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apply
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find
bottles
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 and make
it
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them
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 again.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, subsequently".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, bottles, plastic with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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