many developing countries require eight from international organizations to develop. many people think that this age should be financialed while others think that practical aid and advice are more useful. discuss both views and give your opinion.

These days, developing
countries
demand
support
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the support
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of global
organizations
to develop. The multitudes reckon that
this
assist
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assistance
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should be monetary
nevertheless
some populace
assert
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asserts
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that non-financial assistance is more appropriate. I contend
however
non-financial
support
are
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is
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effective but financial
aid
fuels the wheels of development for these
countries
. There are some reasons to affirm that practical
aid
and
advice
are beneficial for developing
countries
.
Firstly
, when international
organizations
give a piece of good
advice
to developing
countries
they can take it for years or generations and attempt to develop their
countries
.
these
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this advice
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advice
can resolve their
countries
’ problems
such
as cultural, educational or management complications or even preserve their natural resources.
Secondly
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non-financial
support
is quite better in
this
sense that poor
countries
won't refund the money
wich
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which
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they have accepted.
This
leads these
countries
to save their money and develop
there
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their
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countries
more and more.
As a result
,
this
opinion which accentuates that practical
aid
and
advice
are more useful claimed by some.
However
, non-financial
support
is acceptable for developing
countries
I reckoned monetary
aid
is superior. First of all
these
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this
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kind of help leads to developing faster in different aspects.
For example
, should there be
healthcare related
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healthcare-related
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problems, they can improve
it
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them
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by purchasing
brand new
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brand-new
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equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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or constituting modern hospitals.
furthermore
, they can assess deficiencies of the country and disburse the money which is aided by global
organizations
, in shortage areas. So gradually they will become developed
countries
.
In other
words
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I affirm that monetary
aid
is better because it helps developing
countries
stunning growth. In conclusion, there are two points of view about helping developing
countries
. On the one hand, many individuals state financial
aid
should be done by global
organizations
,
on the other
hand
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hand,
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others believe practical help and
advice
are effective.
However
, the second viewpoint may be true I assert that financial health is more useful.
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