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You recently sent some documents by post, but they did not arrive at the destination. Write a letter to the post office manager. In your letter, •give details of the situation •describe the documents •say what action you want the post office to take

#documents #post #destination #office #manager #•give #situation #•describe #•say #action
Dear Sir or Madam, I hope you are doing well. My name is Lovejit Singh, and I applied for a job. So, I chose your courier service to send the documents. I am writing
this
 letter to let you know about those official forms that I posted but have not received yet.
Firstly
, when I sent the document
then
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the staff members told me that it would reach the destination within one week.
Although
, the week is already completed my papers have not reached the preferred location.
Moreover
, my joining date is 16th November for a new job and it is mandatory to receive the documents before
this
 date.
Furthermore
, I attached the receipt with
this
 email. It is my humble request to you please take immediate action so that the paper will reach its destination within two days.
Otherwise
, I will miss my career opportunity. Yours faithfully, LS
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task response
Ensure to clearly state the specific details of the situation, such as the date and location of posting, and the contents of the documents. Also, request for a specific action in response to the situation.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate but could be more formal in tone. Additionally, the transition between the details of the situation and the desired action could be smoother.
lexicla resource
The range of vocabulary used is adequate, but could be enhanced by using more formal and specific language related to postal services and document transmission.
grammatical range
There are several grammar mistakes in the letter, such as incorrect verb tenses and sentence structure. It is recommended to review and revise the letter for grammatical accuracy.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • postal service
  • registered mail
  • tracking number
  • envelope
  • urgent
  • confidential
  • compensation
  • investigation
  • documentation
  • destination
  • customer service
  • resolution
  • discrepancy
  • correspondence
  • delivery
  • timeline
  • claim
  • follow-up
  • liability
  • accountability
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