75.Some people say it is government’s responsibility to transport children to school, while otheres believe parents should transport their children to school. Discuss both views and give your opinion
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although
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government
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government
of some countries promote free education and all the accessory supports to students in view of creating a productive population in future, from which it can get long-run economic benefits in future. So the Use synonyms
government
should hire bus companies to pick up the Use synonyms
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for free since in the future the Use synonyms
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, a child, when he grows up and becomes an earning individual, is likely to spend more towards the state by means of taxes and fines. Linking Words
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this
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parents
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