75.Some people say it is government’s responsibility to transport children to school, while otheres believe parents should transport their children to school. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Some say that the
government
has the obligation to take the pupils to school
, while
others would argue that the parents
are the ones that should transport their children
to school
. This
essay would argue that although
the government
might benefit from an educated community, the parents
are the ones who should take them to school
.
On the one hand, the government
of some countries promote free education and all the accessory supports to students in view of creating a productive population in future, from which it can get long-run economic benefits in future. So the government
should hire bus companies to pick up the children
for free since in the future the children
will gain economic benefits from the government
. For example
, a child, when he grows up and becomes an earning individual, is likely to spend more towards the state by means of taxes and fines. However
, I believe that children
should spend time
with their families.
On the other hand
, kids
after 4 years old will start spending less time
with their parents
. This
is because the kid will start going to school
and parents
need to work, and sometimes when the parents
get home may continue working at home and do not have time
to be with their children
. So the option of parents
to take their pupils to school
is an option for the parents
to spend time
with their children
, so the kids
will not be unfamiliar with them. For instance
, in China is very normal for children
will spend years with their grandparents because their parents
need to work and do not have time
to be with them, and this
causes these kids
to be not close to their parents
. I believe that is
important for parents
to spend time
with their children
, so taking them to school
will allow them to be closer.
In conclusion, although
the government
should offer the best to their citizens, parents
should spend more time
with their kids
, so they are close to each other, and that is
why, is preferable for parents
to take their children
to school
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Task Achievement
The essay addresses both views, but the development of ideas is not clearly presented.
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