Some people believe that when recruiting new staff, businesses should try to attract people who can work independently on their own, while others believe that they should recruit people who are able to work in a team. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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task response

Ensure clear stance on the topic

coherence and cohesion

Develop a more structured essay with clear introduction and conclusion

lexical resource

Expand your vocabulary and use appropriate academic language

grammatical range

Work on sentence structure, grammar, and punctuation

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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self-reliant
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diversity
teamwork
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flexibility
adaptability
innovation
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Some people believe that when recruiting new staff, businesses should try to attract people who can work independently on their own, while others believe that they should recruit people who are able to work in a team. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the of older people. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays many people have Access to computers on a wide basis and large number of children play computer games. What are the negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done minimize bad effects?

Nowadays, young people communicate with friends and family mostly through social networking sites, rather than other ways of communication like talking on the phone or face to face. Do you think this is a positive or negative development

In some places old age is valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important. Discuss both views and give youy opinion.

In many countries, childhood obesity is a growing problem. What are the reasons for this and what can individuals and governments do to tackle the problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant experience from your own experience.