Some people believe that when recruiting new staff, businesses should try to attract people who can work independently on their own, while others believe that they should recruit people who are able to work in a team. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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opinions
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recruiting
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others think that it is better to
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recruit
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believe that
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recruiting
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to completion their
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with difficulties, they have no matter to initiative
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self-reliant
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so they will not
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their bosses during
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duty time or other workers because they are
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independent
workers.
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,
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does not need
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with
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, and his creativity
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when he works alone.
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, they might be a good manager in the future.
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, they could not
work
as teamwork.
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citizens who believe
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people
who
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to
work
in a team have reasons to argue their view. One of
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reasons is collaboration which is
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one of the important
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to increase humanity
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society. Communication between
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their experience and
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. Teamwork in the same area
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been
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transferred
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diversity of knowledge between each other.
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, lab technician who works in
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could not
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work
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work
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teame
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team
teams
.
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such
as
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, cooperation,
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adaptation
and innovation. Unluckily, it is hard to
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alone in some jobs.
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, we argued that both sides have positive and negative and in my
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because
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of job,
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of them need
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meanwhile
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of
people
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-reliant
  • problem-solving skills
  • initiative
  • autonomy
  • collaboration
  • communication
  • interpersonal skills
  • conflict resolution
  • efficient
  • synergy
  • diversity
  • teamwork
  • cooperation
  • flexibility
  • adaptability
  • innovation
  • employee satisfaction
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