Some people believe that when recruiting new staff, businesses should try to attract people who can work independently on their own, while others believe that they should recruit people who are able to work in a team. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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recruiting
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recruit
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the ability
work
with a group.
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recruiting
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independant
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independent
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a programmer
work
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to work
other
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Furthermore
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work
as teamwork.
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citizens who believe that is
better to hire people
who able
to Add a missing verb
are able
work
in a team have reasons to argue their view. One of that
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pieces of information
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has
transfered
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transferred
transformed
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, lab technician who works in laboratory
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the laboratory
a laboratory
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apply
work
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a teame
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team
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staff
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