The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.The graph below

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.The graph below
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The given line graphs illustrate the rate
change
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in
cost
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the cost
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of three different metals
such
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as
copper
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,
nickel
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, and
zinc
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during
12
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the 12
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months of 2014.
Overall
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, all of the categories faced a fluctuation
on
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apply
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each month, especially for
Nickel
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.
Moreover
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,
Nickel
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once had the highest figure in early 2014, but became the lowest in the rate of
prices
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price
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change
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among other types of metals. In the first half year,
Nickel
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has
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had
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the highest rate
for
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of
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6
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a 6
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%
change
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in regard
of
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to
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price, before facing a downward trend,
drop
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dropping
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to 1% in March and continuously
to
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apply
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rapidly falling to the lowest at -3% in
June
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. As
oppose
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opposed
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to
Copper
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and
Zinc
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, where its
change
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are
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is
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less dramatic.
Copper
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started at 2%
change
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in cost
at
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in
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January and began to slightly decrease to almost -1% in
June
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.
Zinc
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,
on the other
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hand
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hand,
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start
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started
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with
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at
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1% and began to surge by 3% in the next month before gradually
fall
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falling
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to -1% in
June
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. In the second half of the year,
nickel
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prices continue to decline until
it
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they
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show
a
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apply
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progress
in
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at
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the end of the year
for
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by
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1%. The same goes for
zinc
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, where its cost is
surge
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surged
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to 2% in December. Whilst,
copper
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prices almost
remain
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remained
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stable after
June
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with only
0,5
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a 0,5
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%
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change
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chance
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to
finally
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reached
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reach
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almost 2%
at the end
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of
period
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the period
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given.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words change, copper, nickel, zinc, june with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "surge" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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