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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.The graph below

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.The graph below
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The given line graphs illustrate the rate
change
 in
cost
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the cost
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 of three different metals
such
 as
copper
,
nickel
, and
zinc
 during
12
Correct article usage
the 12
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 months of 2014.
Overall
, all of the categories faced a fluctuation
on
Change preposition
apply
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each month, especially for
Nickel
.
Moreover
,
Nickel
 once had the highest figure in early 2014, but became the lowest in the rate of
prices
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price
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change
 among other types of metals. In the first half year,
Nickel
has
Wrong verb form
had
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 the highest rate
for
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of
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6
Correct article usage
a 6
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%
change
 in regard
of
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to
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 price, before facing a downward trend,
drop
Wrong verb form
dropping
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 to 1% in March and continuously
to
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rapidly falling to the lowest at -3% in
June
. As
oppose
Wrong verb form
opposed
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 to
Copper
 and
Zinc
, where its
change
are
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is
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 less dramatic.
Copper
 started at 2%
change
 in cost
at
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in
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 January and began to slightly decrease to almost -1% in
June
.
Zinc
,
on the other
hand
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hand,
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start
Wrong verb form
started
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with
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at
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 1% and began to surge by 3% in the next month before gradually
fall
Wrong verb form
falling
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 to -1% in
June
. In the second half of the year,
nickel
 prices continue to decline until
it
Correct pronoun usage
they
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 show
a
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apply
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progress
in
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at
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 the end of the year
for
Change preposition
by
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 1%. The same goes for
zinc
, where its cost is
surge
Wrong verb form
surged
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 to 2% in December. Whilst,
copper
 prices almost
remain
Wrong verb form
remained
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 stable after
June
 with only
0,5
Correct article usage
a 0,5
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%
change
Correct your spelling
chance
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 to
finally
reached
Wrong verb form
reach
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 almost 2%
at the end
 of
period
Correct article usage
the period
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 given.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words change, copper, nickel, zinc, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "surge" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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